THE GALLEY - PROS & CONS
Pro - the location
The galley bar itself is great, it’s a simple location, you can get sucked into the setting quickly - dressing one place makes our lives easier but keeps things contained in the narrative.
con - it lacks flare
I’m worried that right now, it’s leaning far too close to ‘just being another short’ - what’s making it stand out, what’s separating it from being just another two hander; nothing. There’s no Niall/Tom flare, it falls flat there.
pro - ciarán and helen
Ciarán and Helen feel like well fleshed out characters, I personally think there’s more places for them to go but right now, they're in a great place going into redrafting. There’s strong bones in place.
con - lacks confidence
While the idea itself is simple and effective, where’s the confidence? We need to double down on making bold choices, telling bolder stories - right now it all feels too safe to truly have any legs.
SO Lets reflect…
pro - the vibe
The idea of two characters in a room having a conversation really can boil down into some great dialogue; as said before, the idea of doing one room also lets us build a vibe much better.
CON - it lacks scope
We designed an entire fictional town and we don’t see any of that, what can we add into this script to see more of that, to show that we have a grasp on more challenging, grander storytelling?
The biggest thing I feel we need to do is to reflect on the projects we’ve done so far, to not just blindly charge ahead with a third short because we “need to do so”. We have some money tucked away for this one; however we know that will go quick.
When it comes to logistics - I really don’t have many worries, one way or another we know that we can assemble a crew; there are enough people in the grander industry who will either enjoy working with us, want to work with us or would be happy to take a few days to help us get something over the line. My main concern is actors; where we are in our short career we have to push to get an established name or two on-board for this one. It’s paramount. However, it all comes back to story and script. We have to make the script absolutely dynamite to attract actors on-board.
My main things that I want to reflect on are the pros and cons of Better Before, John Doyle and Gabriel’s Trumpet.
Better Before - pros/cons
Pros - Good visuals - very happy with what Ali/Theo brought to this project, they’ve an amazing look. Great edit - Will did an amazing job and was very easy to work with. Good art dept - well dressed. Lovely score - very happy with what Sam brought there.
Cons - It lacks - it’s got no scope; it was a trial run, it went nowhere, no success in festivals, it was for all intensive purposes a flop. The script had no depth, my direction wasn’t all there, it wasn’t unique, it wasn’t subtle. It would also be the second short I’ve done set entirely in a bar; this feels a little lacking in scope and originality!
John Doyle - pros/cons.
Pros - Fantastic casting - I feel we really nailed it with all the cast; especially Richard. Great edit - snappy, doesn’t waste time but isn’t afraid to linger. The style and vibe are immaculate - it stood unique in the genre while not just falling into trope after trope, love this. Direction - there wasn’t grand swings needed in terms of direction but it stood well. The location of Archabbey - love it; feels so distinctly Irish.
Cons - Expectations, we had no idea what we were doing when it came to the festival run, this has been remedied going forward. The edit, not specifically the edit itself but the process of working without an editor - for this one it’s less an issue but it’ll come up again for Gabriel’s. Lacked ‘scope’ and ‘mystery’ somewhat, I noticed at Q&As other filmmakers would always get one or two more than us - our narrative is pretty cut and dry however I feel this was improved for Gabriel’s.
Gabriel’s Trumpet - pros/cons.
Pros - Brilliant vibe, it’s singular, nothing in the shorts circuit is like it, it confidently stands as a true ‘one-of-a-kind’ piece, floating between artists film, narrative drama and experimental piece. Cast/Crew - I’m very proud of the team we put together for both the main and second units, however there will be a * to this later. Scope/scale - I felt we truly showed a unique side to Belfast. Vision - it feels like an artists vision was behind it. Ambition - shooting in the public brings a depth to the storytelling I greatly enjoy. Otherworldly religion - it continues themes that we introduced in John Doyle; religious fears, otherworldly powers at work.
Cons - *The team - now I don’t mean this in terms of who was on it but more in terms of who wasn’t! We did so much work just off our own backs when we could’ve just asked for help, we had great expectations and pulled through but I will not do another project without a full unit. The edit - again, the edit was a smooth process but I would not be keen to edit this piece just us again, being in the room is one thing, being the one cutting it together is another. It’s a LOT - this reaction is still very much TBD until we get actual audiances to watch it but there’s so much going on; it’s beefy - 20 minutes will be difficult to programme we’ve been warned of this.
Nialls Overhaul
Right now, the idea is good. It’s got bones but it doesn’t have legs - it’s too traditional and conventional. What can we do to overhaul that, make it more us. Below is my idea for an overhaul to the story to make it bolder, more resonant to the themes we’ve established in our previous works while keeping similar structures and ideas - also to just make it all a bit more ‘us’. This is just one idea, finding the correct idea will take time and discussion.
Keep Ciarán, keep Helen, scrap Clara. Helen is our protagonist, not Ciarán.
Helen is dead. She enters the bar and begins to reminisce with Ciarán about their life together.
While it’s a real pub, belonging to Ciarán when they were together, The Galley we inhabit in this short is actually limbo.
The real Ciarán and Helen are estranged lovers/childhood sweethearts. Years ago they lost their only child and separated. Ciarán drowned in his work, Helen drowned at the bottom of a bottle.
When Helen relives memories in the bar, when she does from over the years we use different cameras to portray different time periods - Super-8 for the 1970s, Hi-8 for the 2000s, digital for the 2010s etc.
Ciarán isn’t Ciarán; he’s really Manannán Mac Lir, the Irish ferryman of the dead. He’s just taking the form of Ciarán because that’s comfortable for Helen as she learns to let go and move on to whatever’s next.
The short rejigs to Helens exploration of her guilt, faith and life decisions as she grapples with Ciarán, slowly realising where she is and who she’s really speaking too.
The bar is a metaphor for death in all its kinds. Physical death, mental death, death of the past.
Digging deeper into the nautical ideas - boatmen, ferrymen, fishermen, divers?
Digging deeper into the folk-lore aspects?
I just have the image of a bunch of nautical maps/charts on a table.
Branching out from Ulster Scots towards Irish myth and legend? Lean heavier into folk-lore perhaps?
Lean into what the water is, why we love it, what it can bring - gentrification of the fishing industry?
The Galley is the name of a boat? Take the short out from a bar onto the water?
Play about with the relationship of Ciarán and Helen - Father/Daughter, Stepfather/Stepdaughter, Estranged family, old friends?
Additional Ideas
Meet the Team
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Thomas Bennett
Director / Executive Producer
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Niall McCloskey
Director / Producer
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Katie Ireland
Costume Designer / Executive Producer
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Jim McMorrow
Executive Producer
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TBD
Director of Photography
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Samuel Morgan
Original Score
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Aoife McGivern
Production Designer
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Eoin Donnelly
1st Assistant Director
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Sam Halleron
3rd Assistant Director
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Katie Goody
Script Supervisor
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Lauren Bateman
Production Assistant / Trainee Producer
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Matthew Branagh
Trainee AD
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Kerrin Joiner
Gaffer
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CJ Snodden
Spark / Electrical
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Mark Ferris
1st Assistant Camera
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Liam McDonnell
2nd Assistant Camera
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James Murray O'Brien
Steadicam Op
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Sam Mair
Video / Data Wrangler
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Riley Garrett
Key Grip
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Aeris Vermell
Standby Costume
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Sunita Shaw
Standby HMU
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Mercer McWilliam Hugues
Production Sound Mixer
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John Panatoyou / Ethan Harlen
Boom Operator
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Abigail Harkin / Jenny Parkhill
Standby Props / Dressing
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Nathan Magee
Unit Stills
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Tobias Little
Poster Design
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Ben Cowan / William Bright
Editor
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Theodore Swaddling
Colourist
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TBD
Post Sound Mixer
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TBD
Music Supervisor
Financial Details
As of right now the full details of how our budget will be distributed are far from locked in, however we believe that we would have to divide what we get with a focus on casting, camera, production and art department. Currently the set-up for our short is a simple one: one room, three characters. What will help our short really stand out is to enhance our nautical gothic aesthetic alongside an ambitious, creative shooting style.
ROUGH COST BREAKDOWN:
Locations - £1000 (book location)
DoP- £2000 (3 shoot days, kit hire, insurance)
Camera Team - £600 (3 days 1st AC, 3 days 2nd AC)
Grips - £TBD
Lighting - £600 (1 gaffer, 1 spark - 3 days)
Casting - £2000 (actor fee, accom price)
Costume - £700 (2 designing days, 3 standby days, plus budget)
Sound - £600 (3 days mixer, 3 days boom op)
AD - £1300 (5 days 1st AD, 3 days 3rd AD, 3 days trainee)
Production - £300
Transport - £FUEL (Get trainee AD who can drive)
Directors - £1000
Art/Props - £1200 (5 days production designer, 3 days standby/1 day dresser, £400 for props)
Scripty - £400
Catering - £400
Stills/BTS - £300
Stunts/Animal Wrangler - £150
Editing - £1000
Hard Drives/DIT/Backup - £500
Post sound-mix - £300
Colouring - £500
Score - £500
We are excited to discuss further and breakdown how to make The Galley happen!
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Independent Talent:
- Sean Bean
- Paddy Considine
- Liam Cunningham
- Paul McGann
- Nigel O’NeillUnited Agents:
- Richard Dormer
- James Cosmo
- Ciarán McMenamin
- Dominic Monaghan
- Charlie Cox
- Hugh DancyHemilton Hodell:
- Mathew Baynton
- Anto Boyle
- Rupert Grint
- Ben Wishaw
- Niall WrightMN2S:
- Aidan Gillen
- Breandan Gleeson -
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